Do You Like My Poem, And can you offer any tips on how to improve it?

Wow, all of this from a dream. Hey, since you've been dreaming that for 3 days, do you think it could mean something? That would be so cool! On the line "How could you abandon me" did the girl say it or did you? If she said it then it would make it more interesting if you wrote a stanza or two about how you couldn't protect her. This was truly a good poem.